Great concept for chaos. I think the speed is great. The energy of the camera, the boys, the dogs and the edit feels chaotic so I think you did a great job creating the emotion and not just relying on the dogs and kids to give it to us. I do also think you could have cut this down more. You are at 3 min. For example, when the kids run around the DR table and then one brother tackles the other, that's your out point we don't need to see them run around the table again. When the boys get close to the camera it's really nice. There's a moment after the duplos are spilled and there's a yee-haw in the music and a moment later one of the boys comes close to the camera and says something. That was a missed opportunity. If you had lined both of those moments up it would have been fantastic. I also wish that in the beginning when you are trying to show calm, the shots were still and static and that you had carried the music through to the lyrics of it's a new dawn, it's a new day. You could have shown us the coffee pot dripping, a newspaper on the table, slippers, anything that says quiet and calm to contrast with the chaos that's about to come.
Great concept for chaos. I think the speed is great. The energy of the camera, the boys, the dogs and the edit feels chaotic so I think you did a great job creating the emotion and not just relying on the dogs and kids to give it to us. I do also think you could have cut this down more. You are at 3 min. For example, when the kids run around the DR table and then one brother tackles the other, that's your out point we don't need to see them run around the table again. When the boys get close to the camera it's really nice. There's a moment after the duplos are spilled and there's a yee-haw in the music and a moment later one of the boys comes close to the camera and says something. That was a missed opportunity. If you had lined both of those moments up it would have been fantastic. I also wish that in the beginning when you are trying to show calm, the shots were still and static and that you had carried the music through to the lyrics of it's a new dawn, it's a new day. You could have shown us the coffee pot dripping, a newspaper on the table, slippers, anything that says quiet and calm to contrast with the chaos that's about to come.
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